10 things to write about in my final paper

1- the obesity of childrens eating dinner
2- fast food
3- candies
4- soda
5- hospital food
6- vegetarian food
7- vegetables
8- chickens
9-fruiits like banana, apple ect
10-organic food
11- the american food pyramid is accurate?
12- chocalate
13. food banned
14. cans food

my opinion about the article......

I  agree with  Caryn Sweeny  because  its true  that these companies are not thinking about people health just about making their money. I tottally agree with each point she makes,  It called my attention when she says that she can't based her menu on grains, but most important  nutrients.  how poor people in the farmers work very hard to survive with their families to get the food stamps to be able to eat.. Also she includes that even if she goes with food stamps she would try to buyt the moest healthier food. Everyone has the right to choose what to eat. food stamps for poor people is important, because that the only way they can survive. however even thought i admit that for some people that the only way to eat, i believe that the food stamps for soda should be banned because thats not healthy at all. One of the biggest problems in United States is that so many people buy their food that dont have the sufficient nutrients and proteins  and they use this food stamps to kill themselves with what they eat. we need to stop and banned the soda because that causing diabetis, obesity.Its sad to realized this is the reality that we living each day.

the spring hw, super zise me and the chapter two of fast food nation.

    Its sad to know how people dont care about humans health, just about the money they getting of the junk food. all that matters is marketing, all this companies are promoting their food by doing advertisements to influenced kids, parents to buy their food. Im saying all these things based on the chapter 2 and the movie "super size me". however in both stories we see how mcdonals is one of the biggest companies who pay the most for advertisements. they also influences people of any age, to buy their food.

I noticed how in the fast food nation  and "super size me" mcdonal tries to convine families to buy combos. they also use the kids, with toys when they have to buy a happy meal. these childrens see everyone eating this food and they also want their parents to buy them those food, thats one of the reasons many childrens in united states suffer from obesity and other deseases, and shows that these producers of this food dont care about it.  in the movie "super size me "I saw how Morgan Spurlock was getting an obsession of eating mcdonal everyday and even 3 times in a day. in a consequence at the end he end up with obesity and feeling really bad not just his body but also in his mind he wasnt the same men who used to eat mcdonals once ina  while.
  
 It was increible when in the school in the film of super size me the children of the school din't regconize others characters like ex- presidents, but when they showed the picture of ronald the clown from mcdonal they all recognize him super happy.

the worst thing of this problem is how this companies like mcdonals tries to persuade the kids with toys, parties, and then the children persuade the parents to buy these meals at the end everyone end up eating the combos. and it something that is not healthy at all and this people are not thinking about your health, they just thinking about to make money.

In both "super size me" and fast food nation we see the same problem mcdonal is trying to make this people buy all they can,not even worrying about their health, or what problem can bring them eating this food with alot of calories. this very harmful for the kids because when they grow up, will problably end up like Morgan Spurlock from the movie. however for this companies all that matter is marketing,

anny2009: essay peer review

anny2009: essay peer review: "Writer’s Name: Anneris Rumaldo Paper Title: the chicken stew Date 4/6/2011 Editor’s Name: Anneris Rumaldo Peer Review Worksheet 1.&nbs..."

essay peer review

Writer’s Name: Anneris  Rumaldo

Paper Title: the chicken stew

Date 4/6/2011

Editor’s Name: Anneris Rumaldo

Peer Review Worksheet

1.       Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

  The introduction is clear and it gives the reader an idea of what two things will be compare in the essay. Also is a good introduction because it talks about something that everyone likes.

2.       What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.

The thesis is: the way my ancestors cooked chicken stew has changed from the way I cook it now.

             

A way to improve my introduction will be by adding more details about the topic.                                                                                                                                                     

3.       Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?

Yes, it easy because all the paragraphs has it main idea in the beginning of the paragraph.

The main concepts are how the way my ancestor cooked the chicken stew has change from the way it’s made now days.

The main points are relevant and clear for the reader to understand.

4.       Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

Try to correct grammar

 Be careful with the verbs.

Each paragraphs gives evidence and example proving the thesis.

     If I find a awkward sentence is probably because I was trying to explain a lot but got confused with the words.

5.       Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

 Yes, the writer gives a clear format of what she’s trying to say in each paragraph. 

The writer also gives a good idea of how different this two same plate were different just in the ingredients.

6.       What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

I think it was really good, because its gives the reader a thesis and in each paragraph shows the evidence of what the writer is trying to say in a clear way of understanding the essay.