essay peer review

Writer’s Name: Anneris  Rumaldo

Paper Title: the chicken stew

Date 4/6/2011

Editor’s Name: Anneris Rumaldo

Peer Review Worksheet

1.       Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

  The introduction is clear and it gives the reader an idea of what two things will be compare in the essay. Also is a good introduction because it talks about something that everyone likes.

2.       What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.

The thesis is: the way my ancestors cooked chicken stew has changed from the way I cook it now.

             

A way to improve my introduction will be by adding more details about the topic.                                                                                                                                                     

3.       Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?

Yes, it easy because all the paragraphs has it main idea in the beginning of the paragraph.

The main concepts are how the way my ancestor cooked the chicken stew has change from the way it’s made now days.

The main points are relevant and clear for the reader to understand.

4.       Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

Try to correct grammar

 Be careful with the verbs.

Each paragraphs gives evidence and example proving the thesis.

     If I find a awkward sentence is probably because I was trying to explain a lot but got confused with the words.

5.       Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

 Yes, the writer gives a clear format of what she’s trying to say in each paragraph. 

The writer also gives a good idea of how different this two same plate were different just in the ingredients.

6.       What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

I think it was really good, because its gives the reader a thesis and in each paragraph shows the evidence of what the writer is trying to say in a clear way of understanding the essay.